Long And Bad Sentences

We’re going to look at synonyms we’re going to look at all kinds of different things a common assumption about wealth is that it is a matter of being lucky and coming from a rich family so a common assumption many people assume so I’m taking an assumption I’m converting it into a verb assumed because I’ve done that I need a subject so many people assume that I can take it out I just put it in brackets to show you it’s there many people assume wealth is a matter of luck and family fortunes now by taking the subject verb many people assume I’ve created an independent clause a common assumption about wealth is then then because I have the is I need a whole noun clause as a complement to assumption right so this way I get rid of the noun clause I get rid of the extra subject extra verb a matter of being lucky a matter of luck y being lucky when you can just use lucky lucky as a noun right it’s a better now than being lucky and family fortunes and coming from a rich family coming from a rich family means you have family fortunes. Clean your essay from useless words with Robotdon.

So again you have to know a lot of vocabulary if the more vocabulary you know the more vocabulary you have available to you to use the better sentences you can write so build your vocabulary very very important okay I went from 20 words to 12 now here I’m going to show you a gradual cutting down according to a study conducted at Harvard University where they research the effects of an price increases have a consumer spending habits shoppers so according to the study shoppers do this or that or the other so according to study conducted so I don’t need the adjective clause where they researched a I know there was research done because there was a study done study reefs teddie research synonyms where they research I don’t care about Harvard University where I care about the study so get rid of all that and just use the preposition on and then you already cut two words then I can even cut it more according to a Harvard University set obviously they conducted it there.

I don’t need to put this verb it’s understood in the word study on the effects of sudden crisis and then I reduced even more okay I went from 22 to 18 and I didn’t change all that much I kept the exact same information okay let’s move on use a synonym so we already gave you an example I’m going to give you some more the main argument when it comes to the benefit of co-education is that this type of education will allow students to interact with all types of people that these students may meet a society again I made these sentences a little bit exaggerated they’re really bad sentences but again I do see sometimes I do sometimes see sentences like these in writing so I went from 34 words to 14 how the main argument when it comes to the benefit of co-education.

Dealing With Writing Frustration

Many students throughout the generation have found writing difficult even professional writers often describe the process as painful when confronted with dry sources writer’s block and the vicious editing process many writers and teachers say that writing is simple you just sit down open up a vein and bleed so many writers have uttered similar ideas that we cannot even decide who said it first writing though can really be very easy when one follow some simple rules do your research plan and outline focus on a thesis use quotes to prove your ideas cite the sources create a short conclusion and avoid passive language all these will be explained in detail over the next few minutes your writing should be clear strong and easy to read if you follow the advice given here students are often most frustrated when they try to write too soon.

Which means that they sit down to type something without knowing what they want to say or prove writing without a plan is a recipe for disaster very few people can create an essay in their mind and type it into a screen at the same time and most people who try this end up spending a lot of time accomplishing very little eventually their main goal goes from writing a good essay to simply fulfilling the minimum length that the teacher demanded in the end many just want to finish the assignment because it has become so difficult the slow progress begins to feel like a kind of torture as they watch the cursor on their screen blink at them again and again and again while their mind starts to wander from the essay they should be writing to something they would rather be doing student’s ability to distract themselves as a bottomless hole that they can prevent themselves from falling into by simply doing their research and making a plan in my discipline history the vast amount of work that goes into an essay lies in doing the research needed to learn about a topic.

This includes deciding on topic finding books articles and other scholarly resources actually reading all of that material taking notes on the main ideas discussed and figuring out how the ideas relate to each other that part alone can take many days so about 90% of the work on essays and my discipline is taken up by basic research students that try to write an essay without doing a basic research set themselves up for a painful experience and often a low grade once you have learned a good amount about your topic the next step is to plan your essay what are you most interested in where any controversies expressed and the sources you read did the writers argue about anything you should develop a plan despite which type of essay you want to write I normally do this by creating an outline the outline should contain a thesis statement that clearly says what the essay will focus on or prove a few main points that will be the bulk of the essay.

Case Study: A Symptom And A Problem

You should be talking about what types of new information will actually help take better decisions right so all these become very important because these are like the like all these three put together is the heart of case study analysis in any situation then the question becomes what is the difference between symptom and a problem and why was i harping about trying to understand the difference between a symptom and a problem because again as I said let me repeat this this kind of analysis will lead you to better define the problems facing the decision-makers now one of the interesting tools that you can always use or methods let me say not a tool is the four wise or five wise approach okay in this way you it’ll always help you truly differentiate between a symptom and a problem so let me take a step back and tell you what is the symptom and what is a problem you have a fever a temperature body. Discover more info on case studies at Edusson.

Temperature of 103 degrees centigrade or Celsius that is a symptom if you dig deeper then you realize that you may have some kind of an ailment that is actually leading to that fever if you don’t dig deeper you are essentially treating the fever or the temperature and actually not the underlying cause now the same thing applies to business problems as well if sales have gone down right and if you keep hitting at the peripheral level you may never be really able to solve the deeper issues so let’s say in the case study it is said that sales are declining so how do you use the four or let’s say the Firewise approach here we I’m just for the sake of illustration I’m showing you three wise right so why have sales declined let’s say we call it why number one sales have declined because there are too many sales territories that do not have a sales person brilliant so then you dig deeper and then you ask okay so why is it that there are so many territories unassigned to sales people.

Why is it that there are so many territories without salespeople it doesn’t make any sense now the reason why there are so many sales territories that are unassigned is because so many salespeople have left the company in the past one year so the turnover or the attrition rate has essentially doubled in the sales department and then you start asking the third why which is okay so why the hell has the attrition rate doubled and then you realize that okay so the compensation plan or let’s say the variable compensation plan right or the incentive plan was changed because the CFO thought that that is a better way of going about it to reduce the variable expenses and because of that it kind of demotivated these salespeople and then they started leaving the company so now if you look at it your original symptom the sales decline you know it is not a marketing problem anymore it is actually happening because of a human resource problem.

Review: Divergent, by Veronica Roth

The writing was tight and I enjoyed how it showed what Tris thought and felt, rather than told. Every sentence, every paragraph, every scene had a purpose. There were only a few paragraphs where I noted repetition.

PLOT: 3.5
Tris was born in Abnegation, the faction of the selfless. When she becomes of age, she must choose what faction she’d like to devote her life to the Abnegation, the Dauntless (the brave), the Erudite (the intelligent), the Candor (the truth-seekers) or the Amity (happiness friendship). And it’s faction before blood having a relationship with your family if they are in a different faction is frowned upon. Which I didn’t like.

The problem with extremes is that they are often unbelievable. How did the world end up like this? Is the whole world like this, or only future Chicago? The idea that peace could only be kept by creating factions based around a particular way of thinking a very restricted way of thinking isn’t believable. And while maybe as an exercise that’s fine, but it makes it difficult to enjoy the story of these nagging questions keep popping up. I did like the way the characters explored these factions and attempted to break with their way-of-thinking barriers.

However, the idea of factions is nice to entertain, and it makes you think what faction you would choose if you had to. It’s nice to think that I’d choose Dauntless, but I’d probably die during the intense daredevil training. I hate lying, so I’d probably end up in Candor but I don’t like the idea of sharing everything with everyone. The Erudite would be another good fit, but the way some of them are portrayed in the story well, you’ll have to read it to find out. We don’t see much of Amity in this book but it seems like they’re a bigger part of the story in the sequel. They seem to be artsy and agricultural, so I might be the happiest there.

There’s a lot of story packed in these pages, and I felt I enjoyed it more once I got acquainted with the world. Despite its flaws, once you get reading, you get caught up in the world and you can’t stop.

My favourite character became Four in about the middle of the book. At first, he seemed a little unkind and standoffish, but as his character is revealed, we start to see why and sympathize with him. The relationship between Four and Tris starts subtly and builds over the course of Tris’ initiation training.
Obviously Tris’ character arch is the biggest of all (with Four’s coming in second). It was fun watching her grow through her training. I felt like I grew along with her.

The relationship with Tris’ mother was another pleasant surprise. Tris struggles with her feelings about her family throughout the story and this struggle comes to a climax near the end of the book, where I got unexpectedly emotional about it. It’s weird how subtle hints can creep up on you in a burst of emotion. You realize that you care when you didn’t even know it.

Despite some of its flaws, I enjoyed this book. It was a read that kept me up past my bedtime. I’m pretty excited to see where the story is going to go in the next book, and I can’t wait to read it!

7 Tips to Writing a Great Resume Objective

  1. When a potential employer looks at your resume, the first thing that they will read is your objective. If your objective does not capture their interest then they may quit reading and go on to the next resume. You have lost your chance at the job. That is why you have to make sure that your resume objective is something that stands out.
  2. Here are some great tips that you can use to put together an amazing resume objective that will really catch attention and get you noticed:
  3. – Your resume objective should have three parts. You want to mention the position for which you are applying, highlight your skills and tell how you this benefits the company. For example, if you are applying at a hotel for a front desk position then your objective may say, I would like to secure a hospitality job that will allow me to use my exceptional organizational skills and my friendly attitude to help give customers superior customer service.
  4. – Avoid the urge to use clichés. Employers have all seen the general objectives that people seem to use over and over. You have to be creative and actually spend time putting together your objective.
  5. – Do not be too general. You need to write an objective for every job that you are applying for. Never use the same objective over and over. It needs to be written for the specific job and company that you are applying to.
  6. – Do not be afraid to write more than one sentence. In the past, objectives were just a short sentence, but today it is acceptable and sometimes preferred that you use the objective to summarize your resume. If it takes a few sentences to do this then that is okay.
  7. – Use descriptive wording. Instead of saying you are a good worker, try saying that you have a strong work ethic and are willing to go above and beyond to get the job done right.
  8. – Search online for examples of objectives. Sometimes seeing what others write can help get you started. You should think about your objective as if it is a summary of your resume.
  9. – Mention your most relevant skills and qualifications. While you may not be able to state every skill or qualification you have in your objective, you should highlight those that are most relevant to the job for which you are applying.
  10. Many people struggle with writing a resume objective. It is not always easy to know just what to say. In order to make it easier, you can use the tips above. Once you can write a good objective you will find that it is much easier to do in the future and when you master writing an objective, you will find yourself getting plenty of callbacks for interviews. Employers will actually be reading your resume since your objective caught their attention. They will know you are well qualified and want to talk to you further. Knowing how to write a powerful resume objective is a skill that will really help you on your next job search.

Eagle Eye Review

Creative elements:

Eagle Eye, the high-tension, high-budget, high-powered actioner starring Shia Labeouf and Michelle Monaghan lights up the drab September skies with an exhilarating thriller that constantly climaxes, even though the payoffs are too little in comparison to the hype that went into promoting the film.  It featured some of the best actings I have seen for a straight action film, even if it is a bit over-the-top.

Jerry Shaw and Rachel Holloman both get a mysterious phone call from an unknown woman who demands they follow her instructions or else they will face the murder of their loved ones and themselves. On top of that, an FBI Agent, Thomas Morgan (Billy Bob Thornton), joined by Air Force investigator Zoe Perez (Rosario Dawson), tries to track down Jerry and Rachel, as they become the United States’ most wanted terrorists.

One professional critic used a phrase in a review of The Dark Knight that really stuck with me.  It was the phrase, “constant climax”, and it was used as a negative. Well, if there ever was a movie that had a negative constant climax, it was this one. Not because the scenes weren’t executed beautifully or the action wasn’t choreographed with precision. No, it was because after all the sweating and grabbing the seats and the emotion, all the observers get in return is nuts and butter, and it drags the movie down a bit.  It was very entertaining, but it lost the sticking power that separates good fluff films from great Oscar worthy films.

To expand on that thought, remember in The Dark Knight how we waited with so much anticipation to see Harvey become Two-Face?  If, in the end, he had ended up looking like Krusty the Klown, well, that film wouldn’t have grossed over $520 million, would it?  The point is, there were no jokes at the end of the punchline D.J. Caruso was writing. That was my major gripe with the movie.

On the positive side, as I said before, the acting was some of the best I’ve seen in an action film, which was a pleasant surprise.  This was not the screaming, insecure Shia  from Disturbia. This Shia is giving Pacino-like monologues and crying like Tobey Maguire. I applaud him and give him a lot of credit for displaying so much growth in so little time.  Michelle Monaghan brings in her usual grace and wisdom to an otherwise by-the-books role.  There is an actual life for Rachel that she brings to the table and it makes the constant climaxes all the more exciting.

In conclusion, Eagle Eye is a great popcorn flick that will probably fill up the seats in its opening weekend.  However, the reward for its expansive and expensive climax does not match its admission price, and that’s a downright shame, since it could have been a contender.

2 ½ / 5 stars


Choosing a School Part 3

Career Opportunities Count

Although looking up a potential school’s alumni will certainly help you figure out what they’ve gone on to do with their graduate degrees, you should also try to find out how long it takes the average graduate to find stable employment after they’ve completed their master’s program. If there are huge gaps in the employment profiles of alumni on LinkedIn, or if it looks like they’ve had to take a series of low-paying jobs before landing a decent role, start ringing the alarm bells.


If it takes graduates a great deal of time to land their first good jobs, then perhaps the school doesn’t do a good job of preparing them for worthwhile careers. Any strong graduate school, or graduate program worth attending should offer not just a high quality education, but also a variety of opportunities for career success. The graduate schools that you consider should provide assistance with finding quality job placements, paid internships, career workshops and other career-related services. When you explore prospective schools, make sure to ask faculty, advisors, career services personnel and alumni about what they offer in the way of career development both during school and after graduation.

Size Really Does Matter

Many students don’t seem to think that the size of their graduate school matters, but it can actually make or break your entire graduate school experience. If you prefer learning in a lecture hall with many other students, you will likely benefit from attending a graduate school that offers larger classes. However, if you prefer an environment where there is more room for discussion and debate with your professors and peers, then you will probably want to attend a graduate school with a far lower student-to-faculty ratio.


A simple way to decide what kind of a class size you prefer in graduate school is to think about the learning style that worked best for you while you were an undergraduate. Don’t attend a graduate school simply because it has a fantastic reputation, because if it’s learning methods don’t sync up with your learning style, then you may end up feeling disappointed, or falling behind in your studies.


Most graduate school websites list their student-to-faculty ratios, but one of the best ways to get a feel for the size of a school is to visit the campus in person and ask if you can sit in on one of the classes that you might be attending. See for yourself whether or not it’s the right environment by participating in a real-world classroom experience.

How Long Will it Take?

The length of an academic program is one of the most important considerations that you’ll have to take into account, as it will determine how quickly you can start putting your education to work on bringing some money back into your own pockets. If you would prefer to attend a graduate program that can be completed on a part-time basis, then realize you’ll have to extend the program for a few extra years, but consider earning your degree entirely online.


Getting your graduate degree online will typically allow you to study on a more flexible schedule, and at some schools, you’ll be able to proceed through the program at your own pace. As a result, you might be able to extend your education for as long as you want, working on things when you have time, putting them on hold when you don’t, and graduating only when you’re ready to do so.

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On the other hand, some traditional, campus-based graduate schools compete with the 100% online schools by offering low residency programs where students only have to report to campus so many times a year, spending the rest of their academic careers studying online. And even some fully traditional graduate programs do offer a bit more flexibility than you would find in the old days, with evening and weekend classes being offered by virtually everyone, and some schools allowing you to complete assignments and your thesis at your own pace.


Depending on how many responsibilities you have, the flexibility of a program could matter a great deal to you or it could be of very little importance. If it does matter though, then make sure to look for a graduate school that offers maximum flexibility so that your independence and non-academic priorities won’t be jeopardized by classroom responsibilities.

  School Faculty Counts

Faculty can make or break a graduate school, and especially a graduate program’s reputation. Prestigious faculty is one of the most critical elements that you should use to determine where you want to enroll, since better faculty leads to bigger grants, better equipment, more interesting research opportunities and a much easier process for getting papers published.


Learning from esteemed, well-respected academics not only appears impressive on your resume, but also allows you to hobnob with the movers and shakers in your field, lining up opportunities for your post-collegiate career. Well-known faculty will come in handy when it comes to providing reliable references, receiving respected letters of recommendation and finding “ins” at industry-leading companies or academic institutions as well, so don’t neglect this important aspect of the decision making process.


Almost all graduate schools will feature faculty sections on their websites, so make sure you thoroughly check out who teaches within each of the programs you explore. One easy way to assess the quality of a program’s faculty is to see how many publication citations each faculty member has, or how many the school’s faculty averages, and to seek out their individual reputations within their specific academic fields, which you can find by searching their names on Google and spending a few minutes digging around. If you find faculty members that you instantly recognize, that’s usually a positive sign that you’re heading in the right direction.


If you’re not looking to study an academic field but more a practical, industry-based subject then you’ll still want to choose a program that includes faculty who are or were currently top producers within their field. If no one on the staff has been involved in the field, outside of academia, in the past ten years, then you might want to think twice about relying on them for your instruction, as things tend to move a lot quicker these days than they used to.


Faculty may not seem all that that essential at the outset of your search, but they really do play a major role in a program’s reputation, and in the quality of the education that you’re going to receive from your graduate degree program. You might even want to consider turning your school search upside-down, and instead of looking for a  school, then vetting its faculty, try to seek out specific faculty members that you know are the best and brightest, then apply to the schools where they teach.

Choosing a School Part

Some online graduate degree programs even offer accelerated paces, where you can get credit for previous work experience, military experience, or other things you’ve done and avoid paying out the nose for credits or ‘knowledge’ that you’ve already developed outside of the academic sphere. Accelerated master’s programs can provide you with fully accredited degrees in a year or less, so if you’re in a huge rush, you may want to look into these types of programs.


However, if time isn’t of the essence, and you don’t have a great deal of commitments outside of academia, then think about attending a traditional on-campus graduate school program. These typically take 2 years to complete, and involve regularly, daily or weekly class meetings, and some would argue that they’re the best way to deliver a reliable education program.

Make your determination based on your specific needs, including financial obligations, career expectations, and family responsibilities, but don’t forget to take the length of a potential program into account when determining your ideal graduate program.

Location, Location, Location

Location really is everything, especially when you’re choosing where to attend graduate school. If you want to study somewhere different from where you currently live, make sure to include relocation costs in your budgets, look into rental rates in the area, and think about what types of career opportunities will exist for you in that location after you’ve graduated from the program.

Do you prefer to live on the coast, or do you like the dry heat of the desert? Want to be able to go backpacking, or do you like living in the city? Even though you’ve been told to make your decisions based on school reputation your entire life, you can’t forget to think about the actual environment in which you’ll have to live while pursuing your degree, and you should be thinking about what makes you happiest, and what will encourage you to do your best work.

If you don’t think it matters, or if you can’t afford or are unwilling to relocate for graduate school, then look into earning your degree online. Whether you live in the middle of an extremely rural area with little access to institutions of higher learning, or you want to attend a school on the other side of the country, attending graduate school online might just be your ticket to getting the education of your dreams.

Next Steps

Now that you know how to vet potential graduate schools, it’s time for you to do your part in researching the different elements that play a role in determining which school will provide the best fit for you.


Don’t forget to consider all of the above factors as you complete your search, and don’t feel forced to settle for a school that fails to live up to your aspirations and expectations.

Once you’ve made your choice, make sure that you begin applying to graduate school as early as possible and start working on figuring out how to pay for grad school tuition long before your first bills are due. Good luck!